This pretty much applies across the board, yo.

I was 'talking' to one of my efed buddies HI BENNY and the conversation came around to feedback, as it sometimes does.

I'm posting this feedback response that I gave to James Betterman in IWF (as Cynthia Cross) so I won't lose it again LOL and well... honestly.

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I'm going to give you straight up feedback and you can use it to improve your roleplaying and writing or you can ignore it and continue to fail. Some of this is going to come across super harsh, but it's said in the intent to help you.

1: If all that matters to you is "winning" in this "damn" fed, then just maybe you need to find somewhere else to write that is better suited to your style.

2: Check your ego at the door. If you're happy with what you wrote, and proud of it that's actually cool. But the truth is, you aren't or you wouldn't be so worried about winning or trying to change what you're writing to win.

3: Take a class in the mechanics of writing. Most high schools or local colleges offer creative writing courses and you can learn an amazing amount of things that will do nothing but help you on the bottom line of fedding, which is - This is a writing contest. If you can't write, you can't win, no matter how good your idea is. If you can't execute that idea, you lost before you typed a single word.

4: When someone gives you feedback after you ask for it? You say "Thank you for taking your time to feed back on my writing." You DO NOT ARGUE with that person. You asked for feedback, you got it. You can agree with it or disagree with it all you like, but you best stop and realize that person took time to read what you wrote and try to help you even if they didn't necessarily do it in a kind manner.

5: If you find yourself constantly changing your character the problem isn't the character, or the fed, it's you. Stop trying to force your character to be 'whatever' just to win. Start trying to listen to your character when you write about him or her - and you might be surprised.

6: I cannot stress this enough. SPELL CHECK YOUR WORK. Spell check, turn on the grammar check as well. Most word programs have a spellchecker, use it. A line that might have had real impact can be ruined by not having the right word because of a simply fixed typo or mistake.

7: Read.

8: That's right, read. READ. Read the promos of people that win matches. Read the promos of people you might admire, read the promos of people in your fed. This lets you see what the judges like, sure - but it also gives you a basic working idea of the kind of characters that are in the company that your guy has to work with.

9: Read more. The best way to improve as a writer IS TO READ.

10: Never, ever expect to win a match. Ever. I have a character in PW who has a record of 26 - 3 - 0 in singles and ten wins no losses in tag matches. Aurora is the World Champion and one half of the tag with Conor Blackburn and yet I NEVER EVER THINK I'M GOING TO WIN until I see a show. Ever. Keeps the ego in check, for damn certain... and the less ego you have, the better. Promise.

Now, good luck JB. Seriously. But don't take your frustrations out on people that YOU asked to help you.


NUMBER FOUR FUCKERS.  NUMBER FUCKING FOUR.

Love you guys <3